What big concerns did you have about your draft as you completed the first draft? – My big concerns were having enough to say and also being able to make sure everything fit correctly in a well worded manner.
What did your peers like most about your paper? Be specific, perhaps by quoting from one (or more) of the comments on your paper. Be sure to credit your peer! – My peers liked my introduction and how I, “introduce[d] what [I] will be arguing and the sources used to develop these ideas” (Alex).
Where are you working best with Scheuer AND Ungar? What do your peers think you can do to improve on that section? You might quote from a peer, and give credit. – I working best with Ungar and Scheuer in my second and third paragraph, however, Alex says it would benefit me to include more quotes from them, and I completely agree. I look back now and they are only referenced a few times.
Where are you working best with the Core Handbook? What do your peers think you can do to improve on that section? You might quote from a peer, and give credit. – With the Core Handbook, I use it as evidence and provide examples to back up my positioning. I, ” do a really good job of explaining the handbook and why it is/should be set up the way it is” (Alicia).
According to your peers, what are your two biggest challenges in your work with the texts? How do you think you can address those challenges in your revision? If you need quotes or “evidence,” be specific about the text you should bring into a revision. If you need stronger explanations of your relationships between Scheuer and Ungar, between Scheuer and the Core Handbook, or between Ungar and the Core Handbook, be specific about what you need to explain. (Don’t re-write the paragraphs or sections. Rather, explain what you need to do.) – My two biggest challenges are providing enough quotes from Ungar and Scheuer, and giving my own opinion more (Alicia/Alex). The evidence I should include from Ungar and Scheuer is a definition of critical thinking and how it’s critical for the liberal arts. For my opinion I should explain and connect quotes more and how they relate back to my claims.
Using the guidance from your peers, put your key ideas about liberal arts and the UNE Core into a sentence or three. How will you help your reader “get” your perspective? – My key ideas about liberal arts and the UNE Core are that they do a good job providing a well rounded education, but it should somewhat be rearranged. I will help the reader “get” my perspective my stating in my claim that the Curriculum needs to be rearranged.
