Introduction:
In my first introduction I don’t really introduce my sources and their owners as well as I should have. In my final draft I discuss where I attain my information.
Evidence and Explanations:
I included more of an explanation of what a growth and fixed mindset are in order to better define what they are for the reader.
Reorganization:
I didn’t really reorganize my paragraphs, only added new ones in.
New Paragraphs:
I added a paragraph after the introduction and before the rest of the paper to inform the reader on what a growth and fixed mindset are. This improves the paper by providing more clarity to the readers. I also included a conclusion paragraph to wrap up my paper.
